Is this good poem ?? girl poem!?

It's a nice play on he loves me he loves me not. Sometimes the flow bogs down. Ex. Does he know I love him lots?---For me he's on mine all the time. Does he think me just a mime-----Or does he think that my star shines.These are just suggestions where you can drop and add words that keep your meaning but make the poem's meter better. It's cute----Keep Writing-----------------------william